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COUNTDOWN TO COLLEGE: SEVEN THINGS TO KNOW ABOUT WRITING A KILLER COLLEGE ESSAY As I read student essay after student essay t his fall, I often find myself asking, in not such a polite tone, “What were they thinking?” Grammar and usage mistakes are rampant, a nd many students are clueless when it comes to writing a non-academic paper. Here are some of the worst offenders. I ncorrect grammar: People are referred to as who or whom; only things are that. I see a lot of “She was the teacher that meant the most to me.” When it should be, “She was the teacher who meant the most to me.” W eak words to avoid: These are words that d on’t help advance your thoughts. My vote for the most overused word in college essays i s “interesting” — unfortunately,it is not i nteresting at all. I consider the word interesting to be same as “um,” “like” and “ you know” in conversation. They are m eaningless fillers that don’t help advance t he writing or the conversation. Equally wasteful words include: “unique” (not really u nique), “truly,” “partake” and “really.” W ords and phrases that should only be used sparingly include: “being that,” “that said,” “ it,” “this,” “these” and “those.” P assive voice: It is much more pleasing ( didn’t use the word “interesting”!) to read “Dr. Jeckyll mentored me” versus “I was m entored by Dr. Jeckyll.” A ctive verbs are your friends: Think c reatively and use your senses when describing things. Think about how much more powerful is it to say “the line snaked a round the corner” versus “we waited in a l ong line forever.” Try to create some imagery with your writing and you’re likely to keep y our reader more engaged. Avoid clichés: I find clichés to be the worst offender of all. Cliches are common phrases o r idioms that are so overused that they’ve become worthless and indicative of a lazy writer. Please don’t use the following: “outside my comfort zone”, “broaden my horizons,” “ every cloud has a silver lining,” “I’m a p eople person,” “I’m a jack-of-all-trades,” “thinking outside the box,” “at the end of t he day,” “take it to the next level,” “ bursting your bubble,” “in the nick of time,” “you win some, you lose some,” “good things c ome to those who wait.” A nd the biggest offender in college e ssays would be … “I learned more from them than they learned from me.” Please d on’t say that. LEE BIERER THE CHARLOTTE OBSERVER LUMINASTOCKGETTY IMAGES/ISTOCKPHOTO Democrat and Chronicle Tuesday,October20,2015 HERROCHESTER.COM Lynne Hobaica couldn’t be happier in a career choice that has led her to Rochester. As the new ceramics studio manager at Genesee Center for the Arts and Education, she teaches three classes — two drawing-related, and one wheel throwing course. She completed her residency at the center in 2011and came back just a few months ago. “After working at the center, I knew I wanted to come back to a community center,” she says. “Here everyone is excited and enthusiastic. There is a general curiosity.” Anative of Phoenix, Arizona, Hobaica had an unconventional introduc- t ion into the pottery world during her junior year at Syracuse University after taking a throwing class. It wasn’t until she attended a visiting artist’s workshop and exhibition, that she noticed food was served in the artist’s hand-thrown pottery during the potluck that followed. Hobaica then knew she wanted to study ceramics. “ There’s a strong community and large support for ceramics,” she says. “That’s what drew me in.” After earning a bachelor’s degree in art history at Syracuse in 2010, Hobaica transplanted to Rochester to c omplete her residency at the Genesee Center. A year later, she moved to Pennsylvania and started a worldwide search for a compelling master’s program. She reached out to a friend in Austria who had his own personal c eramic studio; and in 2013 decided to move to Austria to study at the University of Art and Design at Linz. She finished her MFA in Sculptural Concepts and Ceramics this year. “I was interested in the approach to c eramics in Austria,” Hobaica says. “There, there isn’t an appreciation of ceramics, so they look at it in a very conceptual approach. It forced me to look at it in a different way.” Hobaica is thankful for her five years of involvement at the Genesee Center. She most enjoys seeing students take a class, return and blossom in the techniques they’ve learned. “The curiosity that everyone has and their excitement to come in and make art inspires me,” she says. “That Ican teach and help them is just amazing.” Hobaica is returning to Austria this fall to finish her thesis, and is currently planning her next solo exhibition in March. Her most recent body of work w ill be on display at the Firehouse Gallery at the Genesee Center. “ There is no title yet, but it will be a continuation of the art that I already make which playfully depicts my r eflections on the strange dynamics of human relationships and the awkwardness of navigating life in genera l.” As an artist, Hobaica enjoys mak- i ng both functional and conceptual p ottery. But she knows that eventually she’ll have to choose. “ I think to be an artist you have to have a focus on one thing,” she says. “I enjoy making functional pottery b ut conceptual pottery feeds my soul. Right now I’m just excited to be back Woman to Watch: Lynne Hobaica KATE LOVERINGKATE LOVERING Lynne Hobaica SeeWOMAN,Page2C LEAH SHAW THE DAILY DOSE We tell girls that they can be anything, but we question them if they don’t w ant to be stereotypically girly. Asmall group of entrepreneurs is fighting back against clothing that enforces rigid gender stereotypes, but fight isn’t the right word. Why in the world d oes it matter if a 4-year-old girl wants a blue T-shirt? But seriously, go try to find one. United under the campaign hashtag, #ClothesWithoutLimits, started with 10 c ompanies mostly operating out of their garages and living rooms are devoted to giving girls options beyond pinks, purples and yellows, lace, flowers and s parkles. The group now includes 17 members and counting. No one can pinpoint exactly when it happened, but mainstream girls departments now seem vigilantly pinkified and really sparkly. Launched by concerned parents, none of these #ClothesWithoutLimits business owners planned to jump into a clothing revolution. Each acted because t hey have young girls who were confused by what they saw in the girls’ department. HALFPOINTGETTY IMAGES/ISTOCKPHOTO PINK? N OT THIS GIRL Social campaign devoted to giving girls non-stereotypical clothing BY DEBRA D. BASS THE SEATTLE TIMES S eeGIRLS,Page6C

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